I think what you posted was actually very reasonable. However, think about this, what if you added a little information? I am not suggesting your information isn't good, however suppose you added something that grabbed a person's attention? I mean Progress 4GL is a little vanilla. You ought to peek at Yahoo's front page and see how they create news titles to get people to click. You might try adding a video or a related picture or two to grab readers interested about what you've got to say. In my opinion, it could make your website a little livelier.
